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Galatea

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Creator, why invent me without flaws?
In me you see a goddess so divine
But absolute perfection isn't mine
To give to you to fuel your endless lust.

My darling, do I give your heart desire?
You live to dream, but you will never see
That light sheds truth on nighttime's fantasy:
As the sun rises, I return to dust.

By Aphrodite's grace, you know I trust
Your judgment when you call me beautiful
As the Huntress' moon, radiant, full--
Yet not so flawless, as I have discussed.

I am your Galatea, made alive,
But only in your mind can I survive.
Soooo...

DFC Day 2: Canzone
I decided to be kind to myself and write this one with 10-syllable lines, which are hella more natural more me than 11-syllable lines because I grew up with Shakespeare and have tried iambic pentameter before in crappy sonnets.
Rhyme: ABBC DEEC CFFC GG.

Galatea is from a Greek myth in which a lonely man makes a woman out of clay. She's perfect. Too perfect. And I've noticed that a lot of people involved in any sort of romantic relationship tend to idolize the other person and refuse to see their flaws. I'm totally guilty. We've all done it at some point or another.

This was an enormous pain in the ass, and I'm still not quite satisfied with it... the last two lines feel super forced. I hate couplets. Yes, I do. If anyone has a brilliant idea, please feel free to drop me a comment. For now, I'm passing out. :faint:

The goal is to get over this panicking sensation I feel every time I attempt a fixed form poem. :D

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